tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post2760049098307056593..comments2024-03-22T08:04:05.869-07:00Comments on 魚之樂: 武俠片段Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-65265464781752176922012-02-08T00:19:31.988-08:002012-02-08T00:19:31.988-08:00謝謝。謝謝。W. Wonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07161244576570372004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-52228986414890012582012-02-07T19:27:40.171-08:002012-02-07T19:27:40.171-08:00金庸的味道很重。已設定武功高低的三個層次,很好。
加把勁。期待閱讀大作。金庸的味道很重。已設定武功高低的三個層次,很好。<br /><br />加把勁。期待閱讀大作。少爺安https://www.blogger.com/profile/03713370011104231073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-24889061571716165062012-02-06T19:00:49.886-08:002012-02-06T19:00:49.886-08:00//描寫得不夠細膩...多些對面容和四周環境的聲響描繪...//
For longer scenes...//描寫得不夠細膩...多些對面容和四周環境的聲響描繪...//<br />For longer scenes that could be a good suggestion. But I don't see that's a problem here because I think it is meant to be a short scene, probably leading to a big fighting scene with a much better fighter. Contrast, contrast. --zpdrmnAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-33552762948719313842012-02-06T18:41:42.921-08:002012-02-06T18:41:42.921-08:00叫《王叫獸智勝一嚿雲》,是推理小說.叫《王叫獸智勝一嚿雲》,是推理小說.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-7827817505189284982012-02-06T01:09:55.801-08:002012-02-06T01:09:55.801-08:00叫《俊文少氣煞沈沛雲》。叫《俊文少氣煞沈沛雲》。W. Wonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07161244576570372004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-9915892581399032112012-02-06T01:07:06.739-08:002012-02-06T01:07:06.739-08:00叫《王叫獸智鬥沈沛雲》?叫《王叫獸智鬥沈沛雲》?Meshinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-61977484074172165112012-02-05T23:45:07.883-08:002012-02-05T23:45:07.883-08:00留俾你寫好過。留俾你寫好過。W. Wonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07161244576570372004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-23688628804440610032012-02-05T23:44:26.212-08:002012-02-05T23:44:26.212-08:00謝謝!恐怕要等一段時間了。謝謝!恐怕要等一段時間了。W. Wonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07161244576570372004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-63995478540851758852012-02-05T08:56:34.798-08:002012-02-05T08:56:34.798-08:00你還是索性寫個故仔﹐叫《怪俠沈沛雲》算啦~~你還是索性寫個故仔﹐叫《怪俠沈沛雲》算啦~~文少http://jonathan_sky.mysinablog.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-44367184272251603032012-02-05T05:33:32.344-08:002012-02-05T05:33:32.344-08:00其實,讀武俠時,武打很少會細讀。虛構世界裡面的人物描寫,還有整部小說烘托出來的歷史感,似乎更讓人如痴...其實,讀武俠時,武打很少會細讀。虛構世界裡面的人物描寫,還有整部小說烘托出來的歷史感,似乎更讓人如痴如醉。當然這是個人感受。cycAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-1066198664071797982012-02-05T02:24:53.946-08:002012-02-05T02:24:53.946-08:00我欣賞「江湖不知沈戟,沈戟亦不懂江湖」這句。
期待博主大作出版 =]我欣賞「江湖不知沈戟,沈戟亦不懂江湖」這句。<br />期待博主大作出版 =]Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-66858048755902030462012-02-04T20:55:14.861-08:002012-02-04T20:55:14.861-08:00將來放在故事的脈絡裏,一切自會清楚。將來放在故事的脈絡裏,一切自會清楚。W. Wonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07161244576570372004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-41793059580552954882012-02-04T19:16:31.710-08:002012-02-04T19:16:31.710-08:00(1) 想來沉沙劍必是名物,既是名物,何以大名鼎鼎無刃山莊少莊主孔翔東竟對持劍之人毫不疑疑,派個武功...(1) 想來沉沙劍必是名物,既是名物,何以大名鼎鼎無刃山莊少莊主孔翔東竟對持劍之人毫不疑疑,派個武功平庸的隨從伸手就去取?<br /><br />(2) 少莊主一上來不問因由便搶劍,打不過又掉頭走人,少莊主很橫蠻無禮、不似出自名門受過敎育噃,所謂「大名鼎鼎」,「鼎」的是甚麽?karolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02084568568697033567noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-36541173153010407462012-02-04T16:34:42.747-08:002012-02-04T16:34:42.747-08:00呢排任何昆蟲都有寓意。呢排任何昆蟲都有寓意。Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-73127491124322351922012-02-04T12:25:45.794-08:002012-02-04T12:25:45.794-08:00謝謝你的意見。我的一個朋友卻說這段寫得很有張力,讀者真的很難滿足呀!
這段是故意沒有對話的。謝謝你的意見。我的一個朋友卻說這段寫得很有張力,讀者真的很難滿足呀!<br /><br />這段是故意沒有對話的。W. Wonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07161244576570372004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-62397464607376363992012-02-04T11:53:46.192-08:002012-02-04T11:53:46.192-08:00期待著...
哈...謝謝你...確實有人比人笑下都唔得
ps. 大家都在pacific time ...期待著...<br />哈...謝謝你...確實有人比人笑下都唔得<br />ps. 大家都在pacific time zone非理性的人https://www.blogger.com/profile/16760624547686865994noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-57980138169309262832012-02-04T11:46:09.737-08:002012-02-04T11:46:09.737-08:00寫好會找朋友幫忙出版。
你說笑我又怎會介意?寫好會找朋友幫忙出版。<br /><br />你說笑我又怎會介意?W. Wonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07161244576570372004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-53139654641172347672012-02-04T11:45:36.969-08:002012-02-04T11:45:36.969-08:00期待你的成品,但會在那裡post?
筆名又如何,李生果邊叫你「汪汪」,
不如就叫「旺旺」。
ps.純...期待你的成品,但會在那裡post?<br />筆名又如何,李生果邊叫你「汪汪」,<br />不如就叫「旺旺」。<br />ps.純粹搞笑,並無冒犯之意,請別要介意;<br />如有不快、多多原諒。非理性的人https://www.blogger.com/profile/16760624547686865994noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-66402523760584191422012-02-04T11:43:15.066-08:002012-02-04T11:43:15.066-08:00um...我反而覺得描寫得不夠細膩
比如人物在打鬥時,可以多些對面容和四周環境的聲響描繪就好了。
...um...我反而覺得描寫得不夠細膩<br /><br />比如人物在打鬥時,可以多些對面容和四周環境的聲響描繪就好了。<br />就那沈戟兩手迅速抱圓那招來說,使招時會不會令四周的氣流有聲?他當時是怎樣的表情?<br /><br />寫得很略,沒甚麼「張力」。<br /><br />另外,如果可以的話,有沒有寫對話的部分可以看看?Hinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15406010786911236227noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-27607346326124778942012-02-04T10:33:23.505-08:002012-02-04T10:33:23.505-08:00這該是口味的分別,金庸寫武打也是寫得極仔細的,古龍則給讀者很大的想像空間,但我喜歡金庸的寫法。這該是口味的分別,金庸寫武打也是寫得極仔細的,古龍則給讀者很大的想像空間,但我喜歡金庸的寫法。W. Wonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07161244576570372004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-44396699506520506302012-02-04T10:23:31.071-08:002012-02-04T10:23:31.071-08:00//不可能和金庸比!
對。
我則期待大陸出第二個金庸。很多大陸的作家令人驚呀,只欠包裝或時機:如...//不可能和金庸比!<br /><br />對。<br /><br />我則期待大陸出第二個金庸。很多大陸的作家令人驚呀,只欠包裝或時機:如果韓寒的代筆以自己身份出書,應很難會這樣流行。Yanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05543452661425487649noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-28255135713094373922012-02-04T09:54:35.767-08:002012-02-04T09:54:35.767-08:00坦白講,小弟嫌幾多埋牙位描述得太仔細,給小弟的想像空間不多。
例如://抱成一個人頭大小的圓圈//
...坦白講,小弟嫌幾多埋牙位描述得太仔細,給小弟的想像空間不多。<br />例如://抱成一個人頭大小的圓圈//<br />如果是 「孔翔飛續向六隻蒼蠅連環出指,沈戟兩手迅速抱成圓圈」<br />這樣,想像空間比較多,大與小,由得讀者想像<br />小弟想嘛 想像空間 是武俠小說最重要元素之一非理性的人https://www.blogger.com/profile/16760624547686865994noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-74865562450042814432012-02-04T09:44:20.797-08:002012-02-04T09:44:20.797-08:00不可能和金庸比!遲些會一口氣把小說寫完,不過不會在這裏 post 了。不可能和金庸比!遲些會一口氣把小說寫完,不過不會在這裏 post 了。W. Wonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07161244576570372004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-49841728923621510762012-02-04T09:41:59.743-08:002012-02-04T09:41:59.743-08:00有些名字是有典故的:「折戟沉沙鐵未消」。有些名字是有典故的:「折戟沉沙鐵未消」。W. Wonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07161244576570372004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4010478591191633760.post-36850560277597011962012-02-04T09:39:55.029-08:002012-02-04T09:39:55.029-08:00zpdrmn,
Thanks for spotting the typo; have correc...zpdrmn,<br /><br />Thanks for spotting the typo; have corrected it.<br /><br />And thanks for the comments and suggestions too.W. Wonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07161244576570372004noreply@blogger.com